Wednesday, July 28, 2010

Writing Tip #2

From June 23:

I wish to be taken out to the ball game
I wish to be taken out to the crowd
I would like to be bought some peanuts and Cracker Jack
I don’t care if anyone ever gets me back….

Not very powerful, is it? To mark our office's foray to Nationals Park today to see pitching phenomenon Stephen Strasburg lead our home team to certain victory, let’s vow today to use active verbs in all our writing.

Bad: The curveball was missed by the batter.
Good: Strasburg smoked a 103-mph fastball past the dazed batter, dazzling the capacity crowd.

Go, Nats!

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